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Write Clearly: Style

What are the steps I should take to improve my writing style?

Once you have learned to rid your writing of errors in grammar, punctuation, and sentence structure, you can continue to improve your writing by considering the more elusive problems with style.

Use the following steps for a clearer writing style.

1. Choose an appropriate tone

The level of formality depends on the kind of assignment, the reader, and the purpose.

Informal tone is personal, simple, and direct.

  • Active voice is used more frequently than is passive voice (see #2). Sentences may be somewhat shorter.
  • Personal pronouns (I, we) may be used. This style is used in more casual writing assignments, journal entries, and class work which is designated as informal. Remember, however, that writing informally does not necessarily mean you should use slang, colloquialisms, and contractions.

Formal tone is impersonal, with more frequent use of the passive voice, a fairly learned vocabulary, and longer sentences, and with avoidance of personal pronouns. This style is used for academic articles and essays. Remember, however, that writing formally does not mean that you should use unnecessary jargon, clumsy structures, awkward vocabulary, excessive verbiage, or pompous phrases such as "this author believes" in order to avoid using "I" or "we," or that you should overuse the passive voice.

Examples:

Formal:
Research has shown an interesting connection between vitamin A and cancer, but the exact nature of the connection has not been conclusively determined.

Informal:
Researchers believe there may be a link between vitamin A and cancer, but they do not know exactly what it is yet.

Whatever tone you use, always be clear, direct, and comprehensible.

2. Avoid using the passive voice unless absolutely necessary

In a sentence written in the active voice, an actor acts upon a receiver (e.g., "The dog bit the man").

In a sentence written in the passive voice, the receiver is being acted upon by an actor (e.g., "The man was bitten by the dog").

Examples:

Passive:
All beef has been marked down by the butcher. (if "beef" is the most important idea)

Active:
The butcher has marked down all the beef. (if "butcher" is the most important idea)

Passive:
The water was boiled for ten minutes. (actor is unidentified – boiled by whom?)

Active:
I boiled the water for ten minutes. (actor is identified – "I")

Awkward passive:
It is recommended that this experiment be tested for its effectiveness. (recommended by whom? tested by whom?)

Better (still passive):
The effectiveness of this experiment should be tested. (but tested by whom?)

Better (active):
We should test the effectiveness of this experiment.

In a sentence written in the passive voice, the receiver is being acted upon by an actor (e.g., "The man was bitten by the dog").

Use the wordier passive structure only when the identity of the "actor" is unknown or is less important than the receiver or the act itself.

3. Be simple and concise in your writing

Choose a short word instead of a long one when the meaning is the same, and avoid jargon.

Cut out unnecessary words. Use the simple word "about" instead of vague wordy expressions such as "in reference to," "regarding," "with regard to," or "relating to the subject matter of." Use the word "because" instead of "due to the fact that," "in view of the fact that," or "owing to the fact that."

Avoid starting a sentence with empty passive phrases such as "it should be noted that," "it is recommended that," or "it was found that."

Example:

Wordy:
Poor living accommodations give promise of incrementing the negative side of the morale balance so far as new personnel are concerned.

Better:
Poor living accommodations lower the morale of new personnel.

Wordy:
It is expected by management that great progress will be made by personnel in providing a solution to these problems in the near future.

Better:
Management expects that personnel will soon solve these problems.

4. Be precise in your writing

Avoid cliches and overused words or expressions.

Don’t use vague words such as "case" unless referring to a case of canned goods or a case of malaria. (Also avoid factor, situation, position, and aspect.)

Avoid words or expressions that are ambiguous. Be clear in your use of the words "as," "since," "because," "while," and "when." It is best to use "while'" or "when" instead of the word "as" to indicate relationships in time, and "because" instead of "as" to indicate relationships of cause and effect. 

Example:

Since I arrived, I have seen three new species. (meaning is clear)
Since I left my textbook at home, I will share. ("because" would be a better choice)
As I got out of bed, I heard the sound of gunfire. (meaning is clear)
As he is the professor, we should listen to him. ("because" would be a better choice)
As I ate, I studied my notes. ("while" would be a better choice)
While I agree with him in principle, I don't see how his ideas could work. ("although" would be a better choice)

Note: 

You can start a sentence with the word "because" as long as you include the independent clause to complete the sentence (see Improving Your Sentence Structure).

  • A simple sentence would be a sentence fragment if it started with "because" (e.g., Because he needed further information.)
  • You can start a complex sentence with "because" as long as you complete the sentence (e.g., Because he needed further information, he phoned the head office.)

5. Be specific when using the pronouns "this" or "that"

Avoid starting a sentence with the pronoun "this" or "that" unless it is followed by a noun or it refers clearly and directly to a noun in the previous sentence.

These pronouns should not be used to refer to the concept of the entire sentence (or paragraph, or essay) preceding it.

Example:

A scientist’s work has no value unless he shares his thoughts with the scientific community. That is the cornerstone of science. (What is 'that'? Try “That communication . . .”)

6. Avoid the use of "there is" or "there are" to begin a sentence

Example:

After you complete these programs, there are many leagues available for you to join.

Better:
After you complete these programs, you can join one of the many leagues available.

Resources to help with writing your essay

Use these resources to help you write your essay.

Guide: Write a University EssayGuide: Cite Your SourcesVideo: Understanding and Avoiding Plagiarism: From Passage to Paraphrase

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